Is there a better way to structure this sentence?
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I am having a hard time re-working the following sentence. I know it gets pretty heavy near the middle of the sentence. At this part:
design experts utilizing a diverse.
Would a simple comma before utilizing be all the sentence needs or is there a better way to structure it?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL
DESIGN with MB Kit design experts utilizing a diverse collection of
aluminum profiles and components.
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grammar grammaticality run-on-sentence
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I am having a hard time re-working the following sentence. I know it gets pretty heavy near the middle of the sentence. At this part:
design experts utilizing a diverse.
Would a simple comma before utilizing be all the sentence needs or is there a better way to structure it?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL
DESIGN with MB Kit design experts utilizing a diverse collection of
aluminum profiles and components.
Edit:
grammar grammaticality run-on-sentence
asked 3 hours ago
Paul
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It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
– Paul
1 hour ago
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I am having a hard time re-working the following sentence. I know it gets pretty heavy near the middle of the sentence. At this part:
design experts utilizing a diverse.
Would a simple comma before utilizing be all the sentence needs or is there a better way to structure it?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL
DESIGN with MB Kit design experts utilizing a diverse collection of
aluminum profiles and components.
Edit:
grammar grammaticality run-on-sentence
asked 3 hours ago
Paul
1033
I am having a hard time re-working the following sentence. I know it gets pretty heavy near the middle of the sentence. At this part:
design experts utilizing a diverse.
Would a simple comma before utilizing be all the sentence needs or is there a better way to structure it?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL
DESIGN with MB Kit design experts utilizing a diverse collection of
aluminum profiles and components.
Edit:
grammar grammaticality run-on-sentence
grammar grammaticality run-on-sentence
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It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
– Paul
1 hour ago
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show 3 more comments
It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
– Paul
1 hour ago
It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.– Paul
1 hour ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.– Paul
1 hour ago
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Could be better but your the one getting paid
Your imagination does not need to be a limiting factor, combine
MB Kit's NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN experts using "no-cost" engineering
with a diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
Design options are endless with MB Kit Systems’ NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN. Modular T-slot products provide a strong basis for application design, however there are limiting factors for more advanced projects that require strong stability and design flexibility. Examples include "high-load" projects that must sustain strong vibrations or applications under constant momentum load situations may require additional bracing.
Next-Level Design increases a project’s level of integrity, ultimately enabling higher-level build quality for most situations. Enhanced design options include, but are not limited to specialty engineered braces, brackets, spacers, adapter and connecting plates created from a variety of materials such as aluminum, plastics and compounded materials.
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.
– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
add a comment |
1 Answer
1
active
oldest
votes
1 Answer
1
active
oldest
votes
active
oldest
votes
active
oldest
votes
up vote
1
down vote
accepted
Could be better but your the one getting paid
Your imagination does not need to be a limiting factor, combine
MB Kit's NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN experts using "no-cost" engineering
with a diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
Design options are endless with MB Kit Systems’ NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN. Modular T-slot products provide a strong basis for application design, however there are limiting factors for more advanced projects that require strong stability and design flexibility. Examples include "high-load" projects that must sustain strong vibrations or applications under constant momentum load situations may require additional bracing.
Next-Level Design increases a project’s level of integrity, ultimately enabling higher-level build quality for most situations. Enhanced design options include, but are not limited to specialty engineered braces, brackets, spacers, adapter and connecting plates created from a variety of materials such as aluminum, plastics and compounded materials.
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.
– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
add a comment |
up vote
1
down vote
accepted
Could be better but your the one getting paid
Your imagination does not need to be a limiting factor, combine
MB Kit's NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN experts using "no-cost" engineering
with a diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
Design options are endless with MB Kit Systems’ NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN. Modular T-slot products provide a strong basis for application design, however there are limiting factors for more advanced projects that require strong stability and design flexibility. Examples include "high-load" projects that must sustain strong vibrations or applications under constant momentum load situations may require additional bracing.
Next-Level Design increases a project’s level of integrity, ultimately enabling higher-level build quality for most situations. Enhanced design options include, but are not limited to specialty engineered braces, brackets, spacers, adapter and connecting plates created from a variety of materials such as aluminum, plastics and compounded materials.
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.
– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
add a comment |
up vote
1
down vote
accepted
up vote
1
down vote
accepted
Could be better but your the one getting paid
Your imagination does not need to be a limiting factor, combine
MB Kit's NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN experts using "no-cost" engineering
with a diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
Design options are endless with MB Kit Systems’ NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN. Modular T-slot products provide a strong basis for application design, however there are limiting factors for more advanced projects that require strong stability and design flexibility. Examples include "high-load" projects that must sustain strong vibrations or applications under constant momentum load situations may require additional bracing.
Next-Level Design increases a project’s level of integrity, ultimately enabling higher-level build quality for most situations. Enhanced design options include, but are not limited to specialty engineered braces, brackets, spacers, adapter and connecting plates created from a variety of materials such as aluminum, plastics and compounded materials.
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
Could be better but your the one getting paid
Your imagination does not need to be a limiting factor, combine
MB Kit's NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN experts using "no-cost" engineering
with a diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.
Design options are endless with MB Kit Systems’ NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN. Modular T-slot products provide a strong basis for application design, however there are limiting factors for more advanced projects that require strong stability and design flexibility. Examples include "high-load" projects that must sustain strong vibrations or applications under constant momentum load situations may require additional bracing.
Next-Level Design increases a project’s level of integrity, ultimately enabling higher-level build quality for most situations. Enhanced design options include, but are not limited to specialty engineered braces, brackets, spacers, adapter and connecting plates created from a variety of materials such as aluminum, plastics and compounded materials.
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
edited 58 mins ago
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
answered 1 hour ago
KJO
1,977313
1,977313
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.
– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
add a comment |
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.
– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.– Paul
1 hour ago
I like what you did with paragraph two and three. Does this also work for the initial sentence?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining MB Kit design experts, using an extensive product collection, with NEXT-LEVEL Design.– Paul
1 hour ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
Since on another page the materials limitation factors are identified I felt best to "soften" that statement to reduce later conflict/contradiction and bring forward the no-cost aspect
– KJO
59 mins ago
add a comment |
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It's not immediately clear who's doing the utilizing or really what exactly one is to combine with next-level design.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG the "MB Kit design experts" are utilizing. All three compinents: design experts, product (diverse collection of ....), and next-level design all form together to make the project.
– Paul
2 hours ago
@KarlG I added the entire page this text is on. The page on the left includes the text in my question.
– Paul
2 hours ago
Then just write experts, who use. Constant momentum load situation is clunky beyond repair, and while in the first sentence my imagination is the only limiting factor, I discover there are, however, limiting factors. It sounds like you're apologizing for gravity.
– KarlG
2 hours ago
@KarlG Would it make the most sense to write it like this?
Your imagination is the only limiting factor when combining NEXT-LEVEL DESIGN with MB Kit design experts and diverse collection of aluminum profiles and components.– Paul
1 hour ago