A sentence structure that reads easier and more natural
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Here are 2 possible structures of the same sentence (including extra sentence for context).
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! She started acting like this ever since that stupid ring got involved…
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Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! Ever since that stupid ring got involved, she started acting like this…
From the novel PoV, which of them reads more easily and natural?
And what should I keep in mind, if I deal with such structure dilemmas in the future?
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Here are 2 possible structures of the same sentence (including extra sentence for context).
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! She started acting like this ever since that stupid ring got involved…
And
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! Ever since that stupid ring got involved, she started acting like this…
From the novel PoV, which of them reads more easily and natural?
And what should I keep in mind, if I deal with such structure dilemmas in the future?
Please migrate the question if this is a wrong section for questions like this.
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asked Sep 13 at 16:29
Vadzim Savenok
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How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08
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Here are 2 possible structures of the same sentence (including extra sentence for context).
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! She started acting like this ever since that stupid ring got involved…
And
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! Ever since that stupid ring got involved, she started acting like this…
From the novel PoV, which of them reads more easily and natural?
And what should I keep in mind, if I deal with such structure dilemmas in the future?
Please migrate the question if this is a wrong section for questions like this.
sentence-structure
asked Sep 13 at 16:29
Vadzim Savenok
1576
Here are 2 possible structures of the same sentence (including extra sentence for context).
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! She started acting like this ever since that stupid ring got involved…
And
Seriously, what is up with this unnatural behavior of hers?! Ever since that stupid ring got involved, she started acting like this…
From the novel PoV, which of them reads more easily and natural?
And what should I keep in mind, if I deal with such structure dilemmas in the future?
Please migrate the question if this is a wrong section for questions like this.
sentence-structure
sentence-structure
asked Sep 13 at 16:29
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asked Sep 13 at 16:29
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asked Sep 13 at 16:29
Vadzim Savenok
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asked Sep 13 at 16:29
Vadzim Savenok
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asked Sep 13 at 16:29
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How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08
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How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08
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How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08
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It is up to you. If you will continue with descriptions about her behavior then the first is appropriate. If you are going to talk more about the ring then that would be the choice.
In a novel you may be hinting that the ring is important, to be revealed later. In that case you could use the first sentence which mentions the ring just in passing, sotto voice.
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It is up to you. If you will continue with descriptions about her behavior then the first is appropriate. If you are going to talk more about the ring then that would be the choice.
In a novel you may be hinting that the ring is important, to be revealed later. In that case you could use the first sentence which mentions the ring just in passing, sotto voice.
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It is up to you. If you will continue with descriptions about her behavior then the first is appropriate. If you are going to talk more about the ring then that would be the choice.
In a novel you may be hinting that the ring is important, to be revealed later. In that case you could use the first sentence which mentions the ring just in passing, sotto voice.
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It is up to you. If you will continue with descriptions about her behavior then the first is appropriate. If you are going to talk more about the ring then that would be the choice.
In a novel you may be hinting that the ring is important, to be revealed later. In that case you could use the first sentence which mentions the ring just in passing, sotto voice.
answered Sep 13 at 17:14
Elliot
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It is up to you. If you will continue with descriptions about her behavior then the first is appropriate. If you are going to talk more about the ring then that would be the choice.
In a novel you may be hinting that the ring is important, to be revealed later. In that case you could use the first sentence which mentions the ring just in passing, sotto voice.
answered Sep 13 at 17:14
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How is that anything but a personal style choice?
– Robbie Goodwin
Sep 15 at 21:06
Whichever you choose, I don't think you can use "started acting" and "ever since" together in this way.. changing the tense to "she has been acting" reads more naturally to me. (you can also contract "she has" to "she's", of course)
– KrisW
Nov 12 at 22:08